SC2Mapster

I def liked the feel of it, shweet characters and the voice acting was pretty damn fine. No issues there. Fraid to say I got wtfpwned at the terran base though, just seemed to outdo my protoss entourage in a few ways. Also the multiple text flashing across the screen during cinematics was a bit migrainey. Half of it was variations of the SAME text, but with differences based on how the voice actor said it, and then of course there was text on the bottom of the screen :S Quite a few grammatical errors too, shouldn't take long to clean up. (BTW the 'All your holy place are belong to us?' made me lol) Keep working on the map, I think its fantastic.

When the protoss speak with eachother they got 2 different texts. One of them got the names highlighted in yellow. One of the text isn't correct with the spoken text and should be removed without complications. (the other text is correct)

map looks VERY nice! i especially like the asthetics of it and the elevation changes

i havent been able to test it completely , as the cutscenes just black out my screen , gameplay runs fine , but all i see are the subtitles, and hear the voiceovers , but all i see is black until the cutscenes end

id really like to see the full map , but what ive seen so far i like very much!

anxious to see this mapline playout even futher

also tarsalis voice is perfect

other voices could use some work, not on the sound themselves, but rather on the dialogue , to go more in line with tarsalis voice wich i think is perfectly done, his dialog is also very tosslike wich is what i think you should aim for with other protoss voices

ivancos voice sounds good too, but as with zealots, dialogue could use a more serious tone

• Blink breaks the map. From the start you can blink to the minerals, then the back of Ivanco's outpost. You can kill Ivanco and get rid of the beacon before meeting him (which then screws up the cinematics). Also I can blink over to the end of the map and then I managed to blink to the high ground near the ramp and take out the turrets and the tank (again screwing up a cinematic). I think the only solution there is not to have blink.
• Still of the opinion that this map is far too easy. You can storm the NPCs all day long (well, until they die, but still...). I have no use for the zealot reinforcements as they are completely unnecessary. I think this could be solved with a hero immortal instead of the two immortals and Tal'Adun. If you must keep storm, add some medivacs (one at the base entrance, one at the first auto-turret, one with the marines and marauders at the end of the base and one near the tank).
• I played it through again using blink (but not blinking anywhere I felt I shouldn't be able to; in order to see if map changes could make blink workable) and noted that Stalkers outrange most Terran army units. This means that I can walk a stalker in, get one shot off and then blink away. Outside of the few places where I am fighting uphill (and so can not see the opponent) or the PDDs, I could kill most of the enemies without even getting hit (when combined with taking out the banshees with Tarsalis). Because of this, I think blink should be removed (instead of trying to fix the map so you can't exploit blink).
• Repeatedly triggered the marine voice at the top of the base.

suggestions to make game harder:

• You should get ambushed when attacking the beacon or right as it dies (spawn 3 rines and a marauder above the ramp and set them to attack the in the area of the beacon; this should happen before you can get the reinforcements). Periodically respawn these units and have them attack towards the end of the map for the rest of the game.
• Instead of the current reinforcements, you should give: 1 hero immortal (say with an extra hardened shield that stops all but 5 damage, and an attack that does 30 +45), 2 stalkers (no blink), 2 sentry (with hallucinate, FF and guardian shield) and 3 zealots.
• starting army should have Tarsalis, 1 stalker and 1 zealot (makes the fight at the base of the reinforcement area more intense)

I liked it better before the voiceover changes. The voice acting is really bad.

Some other things:

• way too easy: tarsalis can walk in, get a shot off and walk out of most battles without losing any health (shield replenishes). I beat the whole map without using the zealots at all (and not losing anything).
• need to be able to escape out of the cutscenes, I feel like I am just waiting around the whole time
• feels like shields should regenerate faster (but should stay the same for timing on how long it takes to start regenerating). Or the Terran should be able to call for backup/medics. There doesn't seem to be any consequence for taking it slowly and letting shields constantly regen (so if this is desired play, they should regen faster so you aren't sitting around waiting the entire game; if this isn't desired play then there needs to be some consequence for doing it this way)
• parts of the map that shouldn't be accessible are
• some of the buildings/doodads can be targeted, others can be walked through
• Tarsalis's warp blade attack is more powerful than his lightning attack, but the lightning attack is what he seems to want to use instead
• The siege tank or auto turrets should be detectors. Right now you can take out the missile turrets from outside the tank range and then just walk around with Tarsalis
• Psionic storm shouldn't be here at all (again it makes the fights far too easy, esp because the units walk right back to where they started from when you fired it the first time). Perhaps consider pulling both immortals and the HT and replacing them with a single hero immortal.
• There is quite a few typos and grammar mistakes in the text

Still playing through but I noticed two typos, you misspelled matter as mater, and when he says our lives are bound to the mission you spelled bound as bond. I'll update this list if i see others.

Also, voiceover sound level seems low compared to the normal sound level of the game, if there is a way to adjust it in the editor you should probably turn it up a bit.

The reinforcements given after killing the first "boss" seem to be a bit of overkill. With a little micro I managed to beat the rest of the game losing oly one zealot due to a careless mistake. The final battle with the tank would be made much harder if I wasn't able to target the missle turrets from outside the tanks range with stalkers and immortals.

It's really cool, voice are pretty well done for protoss, and it looks like a nice try at creating your own plot. Too early to tell but i like where it's going.