Hi all, this is really really of topic but for english class i had to make a book assignment. Im not that good in English so coul you check if there are some grammar sentences wrong?
here it is:
Antagonist: Lee Yung, A man with the disease cancer. He believes that the bones of a tiger (one of the protagonists) can heal him.
Characterization: Lila, she is a spiritual tiger that can transform into a human being. She can't talk human language. You do not read what she is thinking. Only her feelings, like joy.
Conflict: Lila, the protagonist lived in a zoo. The owners of the zoo had a deal with lee Yung to capture and kill all the tigers. At the night of the massacre the plan went totally wrong. Many of the Triad members were killed by the tigers. But also many tigers. There were still many members alive and Lila swore to kill all that were involved. one by one.
Climax: There were a few Climaxes in this book, but all of them weren't that spectacular. The final showdown wasn't really a climax but at the beginning where the Triad members were capturing the tigers was pretty big.
Exposition: The book is Fiction but it happens in our time. The place where it takes place changes many times. First in a zoo, sometimes in the nature and sometimes in the city or in a house.
Falling Action: She decided to kill all the Triad members that killed her friends and family. The consequences are that she could be killed by Lee Yung. And later the consequence was to give up her spiritual gifts.
Genre: The genre is Fiction because it isn't possible to transform into a cat or reversed.
Metaphor: "The remaining sheep scattered and tripped like girls stumbling in the meadow." He is compared to girls that were stumbling in the meadow because he was stumbling.
Point of View: The story is told by the author because you don't read the minds of the characters. It was told in he - she - it form.
Protagonist: The Protagonist is Lila as I told before. She is a Spiritual tiger that can transform into a human girl. Some other main characters are Steve, a boy that loves The tiger zoo and later on he also turns into a tiger. And of course Lee Yung, the "bad guy".
Resolution: Lila decide to remove the spiritual out of her body so she can't transform into a girl anymore and Lee Yung can't use her anymore.
Rising Action: At first Lee Yung got the disease cancer and he decides to kill those tigers. Then it went wrong and many tigers escape. Lila the spiritual tiger decide to kill all the Triad members.
Theme: The book has many themes. It is sad because many tigers dies and at the end she has to remove her magical spirit. But also action because there are a lot of fighting scenes. (that explains the dead of the tigers)
I have a hard time understanding some of the sentences.. I could fix some of your grammar issues, but not all of them, so I better let the people from America fix this. They'll be online later.. If not, I'll return, and do my best :)
Anyway, there are many serious grammar and expression issues, not any small things that we can come and fix, its better if you can consult anyone around your school (teacher/professor) for help or actually learn grammar. (Or just get familiar more with English and you can write things better, your problem is word choice and expression)
Notes: Maybe say more about Lee Yung than just a 'man', e.g. say he's an older man, or aged, or young, etc..
Who is 'she' in falling action?
Also, I used some big words etc... so if it doesn't sound like you, please fix it up... teacher will tell right away.
Corrected versions: (This is merely what I came up with, I may not have 100% perfect grammar)
Antagonist: Lee Yung, a man who has cancer, is the antagonist. He believes that the bones of a tiger, such as those of the protagonist's, can heal him.
Characterization: Lila is a spiritual tiger that can transform into a human being. She cannot speak any human languages. One does not read what she is thinking; rather, one reads her feelings, such as feelings of joy.
Conflict: Lila, the protagonist, lived in a zoo. The owners of the zoo had a deal with Lee Yung to capture and kill all of the tigers. At the night of this massacre, the plan went awry. Consequently, many of the Triad members were killed by the tigers. However, the tigers also suffered several losses of their own. In the end, though, there were still quite a few members alive; Lila swore to kill all that were involved, one by one.
Climax: There were a few climaxes in this book, but none of them were particularly exciting. The final showdown did not convey enough gravity to fully portray itself as a climax. One strong part, however, was at the beginning where the Triad members were capturing the tigers.
Exposition: The book is fiction but it happens in present day. The location changes several times throughout the book. These locations would include the zoo, the wild, the city, and a house.
Falling Action: She decided to kill all of the Triad members that killed her friends and family. The consequence of this are that she could be killed by Lee Yung. Later, the consequence actually turned out to be the giving up of her spiritual gifts.
Genre: The genre is fiction because it isn't possible to transform into a cat.
Metaphor: "The remaining sheep scattered and tripped like girls stumbling in the meadow." He is compared to girls that were stumbling in the meadow because he was stumbling himself.
Point of View: The story is told in third person view because you don't read the minds of the characters. It was told in he - she - it form.
Protagonist: The Protagonist is Lila. She is a Spiritual tiger that can transform into a human girl. Some other main characters include Steve, a boy that loves the tiger zoo (and later on he also becomes a tiger), and of course Lee Yung, the "bad guy".
Resolution: Lila decide to remove the spirit out of her body so that she can't transform into a girl anymore; thus Lee Yung cannot use her anymore.
Rising Action: To begin, Lee Yung contracted cancer and then decided to kill the tigers. However, it went wrong and several tigers escaped. Continuing on, Lila, the spiritual tiger, decided to kill all of the Triad members.
Theme: The book has many themes. Most noticeably, there is the theme of 'letting go'. It is sad because many tigers die and at the end Lila has to remove her magical spirit. As well, the theme of fighting back, or revenge.Many action scenes are a consequence of Lila getting back at the Triad members.
Hi all, this is really really of topic but for english class i had to make a book assignment. Im not that good in English so coul you check if there are some grammar sentences wrong?
here it is:
Antagonist: Lee Yung, A man with the disease cancer. He believes that the bones of a tiger (one of the protagonists) can heal him.
Characterization: Lila, she is a spiritual tiger that can transform into a human being. She can't talk human language. You do not read what she is thinking. Only her feelings, like joy.
Conflict: Lila, the protagonist lived in a zoo. The owners of the zoo had a deal with lee Yung to capture and kill all the tigers. At the night of the massacre the plan went totally wrong. Many of the Triad members were killed by the tigers. But also many tigers. There were still many members alive and Lila swore to kill all that were involved. one by one.
Climax: There were a few Climaxes in this book, but all of them weren't that spectacular. The final showdown wasn't really a climax but at the beginning where the Triad members were capturing the tigers was pretty big.
Exposition: The book is Fiction but it happens in our time. The place where it takes place changes many times. First in a zoo, sometimes in the nature and sometimes in the city or in a house.
Falling Action: She decided to kill all the Triad members that killed her friends and family. The consequences are that she could be killed by Lee Yung. And later the consequence was to give up her spiritual gifts.
Genre: The genre is Fiction because it isn't possible to transform into a cat or reversed.
Metaphor: "The remaining sheep scattered and tripped like girls stumbling in the meadow." He is compared to girls that were stumbling in the meadow because he was stumbling.
Point of View: The story is told by the author because you don't read the minds of the characters. It was told in he - she - it form.
Protagonist: The Protagonist is Lila as I told before. She is a Spiritual tiger that can transform into a human girl. Some other main characters are Steve, a boy that loves The tiger zoo and later on he also turns into a tiger. And of course Lee Yung, the "bad guy".
Resolution: Lila decide to remove the spiritual out of her body so she can't transform into a girl anymore and Lee Yung can't use her anymore.
Rising Action: At first Lee Yung got the disease cancer and he decides to kill those tigers. Then it went wrong and many tigers escape. Lila the spiritual tiger decide to kill all the Triad members.
Theme: The book has many themes. It is sad because many tigers dies and at the end she has to remove her magical spirit. But also action because there are a lot of fighting scenes. (that explains the dead of the tigers)
Just to check it :)
I have a hard time understanding some of the sentences.. I could fix some of your grammar issues, but not all of them, so I better let the people from America fix this. They'll be online later.. If not, I'll return, and do my best :)
Your post is not valid on a video game forum.
Q: Can the Galaxy Editor ?
A: Yes... but not your homework.
Anyway, there are many serious grammar and expression issues, not any small things that we can come and fix, its better if you can consult anyone around your school (teacher/professor) for help or actually learn grammar. (Or just get familiar more with English and you can write things better, your problem is word choice and expression)
It is in the 'Off-Topic' forum because it's not on the topic of video games. >.>
Notes: Maybe say more about Lee Yung than just a 'man', e.g. say he's an older man, or aged, or young, etc.. Who is 'she' in falling action?
Also, I used some big words etc... so if it doesn't sound like you, please fix it up... teacher will tell right away.
Corrected versions: (This is merely what I came up with, I may not have 100% perfect grammar)
Antagonist: Lee Yung, a man who has cancer, is the antagonist. He believes that the bones of a tiger, such as those of the protagonist's, can heal him.
Characterization: Lila is a spiritual tiger that can transform into a human being. She cannot speak any human languages. One does not read what she is thinking; rather, one reads her feelings, such as feelings of joy.
Conflict: Lila, the protagonist, lived in a zoo. The owners of the zoo had a deal with Lee Yung to capture and kill all of the tigers. At the night of this massacre, the plan went awry. Consequently, many of the Triad members were killed by the tigers. However, the tigers also suffered several losses of their own. In the end, though, there were still quite a few members alive; Lila swore to kill all that were involved, one by one.
Climax: There were a few climaxes in this book, but none of them were particularly exciting. The final showdown did not convey enough gravity to fully portray itself as a climax. One strong part, however, was at the beginning where the Triad members were capturing the tigers.
Exposition: The book is fiction but it happens in present day. The location changes several times throughout the book. These locations would include the zoo, the wild, the city, and a house.
Falling Action: She decided to kill all of the Triad members that killed her friends and family. The consequence of this are that she could be killed by Lee Yung. Later, the consequence actually turned out to be the giving up of her spiritual gifts.
Genre: The genre is fiction because it isn't possible to transform into a cat.
Metaphor: "The remaining sheep scattered and tripped like girls stumbling in the meadow." He is compared to girls that were stumbling in the meadow because he was stumbling himself.
Point of View: The story is told in third person view because you don't read the minds of the characters. It was told in he - she - it form.
Protagonist: The Protagonist is Lila. She is a Spiritual tiger that can transform into a human girl. Some other main characters include Steve, a boy that loves the tiger zoo (and later on he also becomes a tiger), and of course Lee Yung, the "bad guy".
Resolution: Lila decide to remove the spirit out of her body so that she can't transform into a girl anymore; thus Lee Yung cannot use her anymore.
Rising Action: To begin, Lee Yung contracted cancer and then decided to kill the tigers. However, it went wrong and several tigers escaped. Continuing on, Lila, the spiritual tiger, decided to kill all of the Triad members.
Theme: The book has many themes. Most noticeably, there is the theme of 'letting go'. It is sad because many tigers die and at the end Lila has to remove her magical spirit. As well, the theme of fighting back, or revenge.Many action scenes are a consequence of Lila getting back at the Triad members.
@onetwosc
Thanks! will change some of the words because its not my skill :P
love you vids by the way ;)
I speak english, not so very well maar da komt nog wel
@Mozared: Go
haha! wist niet dat jij nederlands was. Zal wel ff solved bij zetten. Ga je trouwens nog iets doen met die "many hands" map, die was wel vet.
@thommiej: Go
Stop speaking dutch xD