SC2Mapster

great job so far! Maps are well made and the missions and story so far are interesting. But the dialogue is kind of long and dull at times. maybe having someone help u with writing is a possibility? One thing i do like however is how the story flows.

Thanks for this good Maps i like the Gameplay. But i play on hard and its not hard enough ;)

Waiting for the 4t Map

This is really one of the more visually appealing campaigns I've played... and I've played most of them. In the interest of being objective, I'm just going to list some things off in terms of pros and cons.

Pros:

• Your terrain, bases, NPC units, and mini missions are all very pretty to look at. It is VERY obvious how much time you put into the details.

• Your dialogue makes sense, is clear, and generally holds my attention.

• I love your innovation in mission two. Good objectives, good progression, and the challenge is fantastic.

• Through the use of diverse waves of Protoss units, you force players to deviate from the marine/medic ball that usually steamrolls everything. I got caught with my pants down on mission two because I didn't have enough tanks, and that's awesome!

• You used a color (purple) that has not been used before in this situation. This is a tiny thing, but it really is a breath of fresh air to not be red or blue. It lends you a unique feel right off the bat.

Cons:

• Your dialogue is a little run-on. There are some lifeless sentences and some awkwardly immature moments from some characters that stick out. Perfect wording is important because (especially with high quality projects like your map) if something distracts me in the dialogue, the magic of the map is broken, and it becomes just some other sc2mapster map. Your campaign is really amazing looking, and it deserves to have text that matches. I'd be very happy to help you with this.

• Referring to every base as "outpost number 1,2,3,4,5,6,7" may get your point across, and it's fine to refer to an outpost as 4 or 7, but having all the places you visit be sequentially numbered sucks the life out of it. Give some of the bases names to lend them some humanity.

• In mission one, the bottom 20% of the map is an open, nondescript dead zone. I know there's texture and trees, but nothing else. You should put a little something in there; maybe a rescuable CC that can fly over to your second resource gathering spot, maybe a lost squad of marines. Something there would flesh out mission one nicely, and encourage players to explore instead of just connecting the dots. Same thing for mission two, you have a LOT of empty space. Have the colonists go out in the boonies and build a base or something with the minerals you give them. Big patches of empty land are the bane of custom mapmakers.

• Also in mission one, it would be (and this is pure wishful thinking) more visually appealing for the Zerg attacking the first outpost to come from directly east, instead of north. The reasoning behind this is an east-to-west attack would instinctively make a player use the outpost walls as cover, and feel like the NPC units were actually participating instead of just being disposable and dead in a hurry. As it stands right now, the awkward attack angle forced me to generally stay outside my seige tank backup, in an effort to engage the Zerg without them blasting through my NPC help to get to me. This would promote longevity in the outpost units, and could allow you to ramp up the difficulty, since the player would now have a choke to exploit.

I hope you're still working on this campaign, because it's pretty great.