Heart of the Swarm #3: to Clone the Beast
I uploaded the second mission a while ago, apparently it went unnoticed. Anyway, here is the third mission. It starts with a fairly simple cutscene. You must bring Stetmann to each overmind terndril much like with Zeratul in WoL, but with one difference: because I suck so much at triggers, you must bring him to them in a certain order. When you build a hatchery (so make sure your drones don't die before you get to your base site) he will tell you the first one, and will point out the next one after each successive one. Make sure none of your heroes dies, or you lose. When the game starts, go to the place where your base was in the 3rd Zeratul mission in WoL, and you will find it there being run by the Shel'na Krythas (Those Who Endure) including Vartanil, one of the DTT protoss who was not in the fourth zeratul mission. Step onto the beacon in front of him and he will show you the site for your base. Tell me what you think of this mission and enjoy! (Keep an eye out for a cinematic map I will upload shortly after this one.)
Be sure to watch the cinematic map I posted after this one.
I played all 3 of your campaign's maps and I thought I would leave some constructive criticism.
The first thing I noticed that you need to start working on is your character's dialog. For someone who is going in to play a campaign that is at least a attempt at something that is professional, seeing something like "Lol" or improper grammar that you would use in an instant messenger program makes the player just shake his head thinking the map maker is not really trying at all.
The second thing is originality. I don't feel like anything in the 3 maps where original. There was really no creativity or interesting concepts to help make your maps feel new. Next time through in some interesting triggers that will make the player feel like they are doing something new.
The third and final problem is your story. Your story didn't make much since to me, it wasn't consistent and I didn't get any actual story. First you start underground and you get a base and finish off the dominion then the next day you have to fight the hybrid for some reason then you are randomly fighting protoss with characters that came out of no where.
Try to watch these things next time you make a map.